@Ben-Siraphob (View Post) is it good that you want help from the others not from you on competition you are in?

@Ben-Siraphob (View Post)
i think i just fell in love *tear*
heh, just kidding, nice story. I was expecting more of a murder mystery though xD
I'll post a story I wrote about an Emu the developes super powers and destroys the world once I find it lmao. I got the story :D



There was once an emu. He was very simple, as he didn't do much other than eat shit sleep and repeat. This emu was named Timmithy, and lived in a zoo.

A fat lady's poodle found its way into the emu exhibit, and to one sick. It was a disease that was very dangerous to an emu, and could easily spread though water, air touching...Spatium Insanit. What makes it so dangerous? It gets inside of the emu body, tears at its stomach until it is torn open, then spreads in you bloodline. Once it is at your brain, you die a gruesome death.

Timmithy, though, was different. Scientists cant get a realistic theory on why, but Timmithy got the complete opposite: super powers! He could now fly, breath fire, and shrink himself to the size of an ant.

He never liked the zoo, he always wanted to be able to return to the wild, where he was meant to be. And now was his perfect chance, so he broke through walls and windows. Soon reaching the morning sun, he felt powerful. And with this power, came bloodcurdling thoughts. He couldn't control it, but he wanted to destroy the entire human race.

After flying for 5 minutes, he had already found a densly populated area. All this city needed was a large explosion...like a gas station on fire. Timmithy set the local gas station on fire, and was out of there in a flash -- BOOOMM!! Flames reaching as high as 40 feet, killing citizens all around, catching on trees, Timmithy was satisfied.

"Pathetic humans," he thought. "Now all I have to do is reach a military facility and get a nuclear bomb. Emus can hide under ground, while the world ends up at nuclear war! Emus will become the dominant race!!"

Crazed in power, Timmithy headed to a military base, for the ultimate destruction. He was ready for genocide -- and the growth of Emus, and destruction of every freaking zoo on Earth. "Ah, there it is, the death begins!"

"HEY WHAT'S THAT," shouted an officer, attracting a lot of attention."
"Who cares, shoot the fu--" said another, being cut off be the general
"Don't engage, its just an animal, let is loose in the wild..." He said
"I'm not just an animal, I'm the death of every human! I came here to wipe you asses off the planet and become the superior being on this planet." said Timmithy, realizing a power of his was that he could now talk.

Timmithy trampled through everything, as if it weren't even there. There were the nukes -- right in front of him. Don't think he didn't have it all planned out, because he doesn't know how to launch it...He had a newbie soldier do it for him. "AND NOW, MY FUN BEGINS YOU WEAKLINGS!!!"

The plan worked, emus lived under ground for the next 2,000 years while radiation levels went down, every human died, emus became the dominant creatures on Earth.

But when emus came to the surface, there were mutated plants, dogs, wolves, birds, anything you can think of. And they had powers too. Seeing the emu, they all squealed as if to say "Now's out chance, KILL THAT WORTHLESS BUG!"

And super powered emus had to defend themselves from the planet. Could they do it, or will the entire race fall as if they were nothing to the rest of the planet?


That was the end, and mmy next story was based on the war
I would like to thank Einstein for my inspiration, my mom for the idea (she is terrified of emus xD) my teacher for the A, my class for being stupid enough to help me win 3rd place, and myself for being somewhat creative. Thank you all <3"

It is good, but does it have to do with the theme? and how many words is it?

600 max? That isn't really a lot, what's the competition called? As in, is it for your class or is it just for entering a competition. 

Give a bit more time developing the characters. You really jump into the story, which is kind of disorienting.

@Lynxrufus (View Post)
I used to, but then i got innterested in programming@Ben-Siraphob!192505
Though you could develop setting a lil more, story is still good
(FYI i just m made mine up, I dont have it anywhere xD)