Ideas for story.

  • ads999
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    Right. I'm making a story and I would like Ideas. It is about a boy named Embre (Pronounced Ember) who's parents died in a house fire which he survived. He has a Birth mark of a flame above his heart. This is what I have so far:
    Out Of The Ash’s

    By Adam Barnett (12)

    Chapter 1


    I woke up this morning thinking how ordinary today would be. Boy was I wrong! First of all the flame shaped burn I have above my heart started throbbing. I received that in a fire my parents perished in and that I survived unscathed. Secondly the open fire in the front room wouldn’t light. It was as if it was trying to hide from me. Grim, my grandpa, was sat on the other side of the room reading the paper. Gram, my grandma, was in the kitchen frying up a full English breakfast.
    “Embre could you come here a sec” Gram asked.
    “Yeah, ok” I replied.
    Odd that isn’t it? I’m called Embre, I’ve got a flame shaped burn and my parents died in a fire. Anyway, I went into the kitchen and the third strange thing happened. As I left the front room the open fire suddenly lit and the gas stove in the kitchen went out.
  • Klotzstein
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    needs to be more stuff like what year, place etc...
  • theguitarguy
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    It's three sentances, what more do you want in THREE SENTANCES?!?!?

    Now, you may be implying that he should include such information at a later point in the story, but you would have to be stupid not to include such items.
  • alecnotalex
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    You know... It sounds like Harry Potter!
    1. Parents dead in an event he survived. (when he was a baby)
    2. Funky looking mark on him.
  • surfcash
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    you dont need to have "parents parished" the second time
  • pastgone
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    how ironic...
  • BlueAmulet
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink

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  • pastgone
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    lol nice
  • Neospector
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink

    alecnotalex:

    You know... It sounds like Harry Potter!
    1. Parents dead in an event he survived. (when he was a baby)
    2. Funky looking mark on him.

    In case you haven't noticed, a few movies and a hell of a lot of animes ride on that concept.
  • theguitarguy
    30th Aug 2011 Member 0 Permalink
    I'm not exactly sold on the
    Boy was I wrong! I’m Embre by the way.
    , it just dosn't work for me